Friday, July 11, 2008

LOST IN RAIN

Steps behind steps, he walked away, aghast,
Maimed, through the mirror, into past.
Rough smoothed into crass effervescence..
Meanders he in rain perturbed silence.

Will he be heard?


Drenched in converging longings,
Whistled he, mellow singings.
Should he take a step back?
To embrace it all back?

Will he be heard?

Neglected. Lost. Dreamy.
Vapoury thoughts, Hazy environ.
Warm tears of rain,
As steps trail the steps again.

Will he be heard?

17 comments:

Isha said...

:):):):):) [five star ni bante he toh five smileyz bana diye]

if m d first one to read it out hea....[joki commentz dekhke lagta he ke aisa hi he]....toh i wud say..it feelz lucky!!!!!

Sahi likhi he yaar!...bt ek panga he.....tumhare writeupz iss blog mei toh atleast tumhari hi life se inspired hote he [ ya aisa lagta he]......pr i cudnt find ne connexn dis time.....[ does dt mean ke mujhe tujhe interrogate krna padega...link dhundhne k liye]

Unwritten said...

silent thoughts !!
hmmmmmmmmmmmmmm

V said...

rain gives you that unexplainable feeling.It washes away all sorrows.

Prabhu Dutta Das said...

Rain gives the opportunity to move into such feelings rather!

Its not always better to move away from sorrows!

Anindita said...

Rain evokes too many memories and too much anguish...

Winnie the poohi said...

just beautiful!! random visitor but you have from now on....

Prabhu Dutta Das said...

Am really staring at the random visitors and comments!

Pooh.. Just as bad that I cant post anything now... Just spaced out a lot!Drop by soon :D

Piper said...

I hate accepting it, but this was quite good. In fact, really good.

You have kept it simple. And that's the best part :)

Prabhu Dutta Das said...

@ Piper:
If that is not your usual sarcastic self ;) I am bound to feel elated!!!

alien said...

After a long time ( or was it the first time ? ) you wrote something that was not only making sense but was also readable..
srsly though.. twas gud..

archie said...

to embrace it back again,

yes

he will be heard....

maybe......

Gamby said...

considering the fact he is behind a glass i dont think he would be heard :)

Mads said...

great one. simply outstanding
BUT it's kinda short. wud hv liked an expanded version...
but it's too good...*applauds* simple n sweet types.

Usha Pisharody said...

Drenched!!


Am coming back in a while to this one:)
Couldn't wait for longer to read something here:)

Prabhu Dutta Das said...

Took me sometime to figure out that someone had actually read one of the previous posts!

Elated!

Sashu... said...

Drenched in de rains, indeed!! its lovely!1 n i loved de structuring too!! :)

Aayushi Mehta said...

beautiful write....you,ve created beautiful visuals with your strong words...loved the last para especially...

just brilliant work...almost can't describe the feelings it sends across...